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The Reality of Eden Prime Chapter 1 part 2

szaleniec1000 Oct 27, 2011 23:55

Last time on The Reality of Eden Prime, Ashley had an altercation with her boss. Who, by a remarkable series of contrivances, happens to be a complete pervert who has the hots for her. And asari companions, it seems.

( NSFW, NSF anything, contains graphic noncon )

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Deserving Chapter 48

szaleniec1000 Jan 30, 2011 00:00

Ladies and gentlemen, this is it. If you've been following the sporking so far, Chapter 48 needs no introduction. It's not even "just" the revelation about the Dursleys did to Harry, but Chapter 48 is just all of the worst of Deserving distilled into a single chapter. Think about that for a moment.

( Deserving Chapter 48 (NSFW, of course) )

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Deserving Chapter 45

szaleniec1000 Jan 18, 2011 02:34

On with the story.

( Deserving Chapter 45 (NSFW) )

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Deserving Chapter 44

szaleniec1000 Jan 15, 2011 01:02

The story so far: Severus has given birth to Harry's daughter with the aid of a Gorean centaur. I've said it before and I'll say it again: Deserving means never having to say you're bullshitting. If TVTropes still had the I Am Not Making This Up section, the entire fic could have gone in there.

( Deserving Chapter 44 (NSFW) )

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Deserving Chapter 41

szaleniec1000 Jan 11, 2011 23:25

Chapter 40, it must be said, is quite seriously one of the worst things I've read in my decade in fanfic-land. You know you've hit rock bottom when you're thinking that at least it's not quite as bad as Celebrian or Agony in Pink. 41 represents a slight improvement, but make no mistake: Deserving still sucks.

( Deserving Chapter 41 (NSFW) )

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Deserving Retrospective and Chapter 40

szaleniec1000 Jan 10, 2011 14:34

As this is the fortieth chapter (yay?) let's take a look at the highlights (lowlights?) so far.

( long list, some NSFW descriptions )

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Deserving Chapter 39

szaleniec1000 Jan 03, 2011 20:28

And here's 39, as promised. Complete with more buggery.
( Deserving Chapter 39 (NSFW) )

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Deserving Chapter 37

szaleniec1000 Dec 29, 2010 19:42

It's been a while since Deserving has actually given us a sex scene, and believe me Chapter 37 more than makes up for lost time.
( So it's NSFW. )

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Phantom Knight Chapter 2

szaleniec1000 Dec 12, 2010 21:21

~morning~ [Show, don't tell. If you want to let us know it's morning, write some description conveying this fact.]

"Why are we delivering food to Squall again?" (space) Zell asked, looking at Selphie and holding a tray loaded down with food. [Capital letters go at the beginning of names and sentences.] "Because I feel bad about pestering them ( Read more... )

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Deserving Chapter 31

szaleniec1000 Nov 30, 2010 18:12

We've had thirty chapters of sheer WTFery culminating in Vincent Crabbe screwing a house-elf, thankfully off-screen, and it's this one the author sees fit to break out the disclaimer:

I am just asking you to read two more chapters after this one before you form a hanging party.

Ladies and gentlemen, strap yourselves in.
( Deserving Chapter 31 (NSFW) )

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